Can you please read this email, native English speakers?

Question

This is an important apology email to a university. I posted a link on their site and they didn't like it. Now I need to apologize and sound professional---any comments, changes, improvements? Thanks!

"Dear xy,

thank you for your email and bringing this to our attention.

Please accept our sincere apologies for unintentionally violating the -forum name's- regulations by posting the link to our online survey in the forum.

The study in question is part of a PhD project that has been fully reviewed and approved by the University of xxy's ethics committee and is co-sponsored by the UK's National Health Service.

We would kindly like to ask if you allow research to be advertised on -forum name- at all and if so, what the correct procedure is to obtain permission for posting our survey on your forum.

Regards, xys"

Answer 1

"Dear xy,



Thank you for bringing this to our attention.



The violation was unintentional and please accept our sincere apologies.



The study in question, co-sponsored by the UK's National Health Service, is part of a PhD project that has been fully reviewed and approved by the University of xxy's ethics committee.



Please advise as to the correct procedure for posting the survey on your forum.



Best regards, xys"

Answer 2

Very good! Sounds very professional :-) Personally, I would put a 'for' between 'and' and 'bringing' in the first line, but that's just me being REALLY pedantic. Also, a capital letter at the beginning of the first sentence is needed (but I'm sure that was just a typo). Otherwise, sounds completely authentic! :-)

Answer 3

Your letter is good enough. No native English speaker would have any difficulty in understanding what you are saying. I ceratinly could nitpick it, and re-word it, but that's not really necessary.