Pleasecan you check my essay about learning English. Thanks for help?

Question

4. Studying the English language in an English-speaking country is the best but not the only way to learn the language. Do you agree with this statement? (Model tests for the IELTS)

The English language is one of the most learned and popular language in the world. Almost all over the world English is a compulsory subject both in the school and university curriculum. There are a lot of English language courses both in English Speaking and non- English speaking countries.
No doubt, that learning English in the English-speaking countries is the best way and can be described as more advisable and interesting. First of all, one is immersed in the English atmosphere. Secondly, it may be very enjoyable and adventurous to learn about culture and traditions of a foreign country. Thirdly, all teachers are native speakers in the English-speaking countries. Finally, it is a great chance of making friends with people from different countries as English courses in English speaking countries are usually quite multinational.
But I do not fully agree with the above statement. For example, let's compare my two friends who have been English learners for two years. One of my friend started her course in Britain when her level of English was intermediate and when she returned from studies which took her eight months her level was upper-intermediate. The other friend was also the same level as the first friend and moreover, at the same time she began her upper-intermediate course but in her home country which is non -English speaking country . In eight months since starting their upper-intermediate course they both took IELTS Exams and passed them with the same scores.
In summary, I firmly believe that, certainly, people who have a golden opportunity of having their English lessons in any English-speaking countries are lucky ones but result of learning first of all depends on patience and diligence of an English language learners.

Answer 1

I am a fluent, native-language speaker of English. I corrected your essay below. It was well written. However, there were just a few mistakes:





The English language is one of the most learned and popular languages in the world. Almost all over the world English is a compulsory subject both in the school and university curriculum. There are a lot of English language courses in both English-speaking and non- English-speaking countries.

No doubt, learning English in the English-speaking countries is the best way and can be described as more advisable and interesting. First of all, one is immersed in the English atmosphere. Secondly, it may be very enjoyable and adventurous to learn about culture and traditions of a foreign country. Thirdly, all teachers are native speakers in the English-speaking countries. Finally, there is a great chance of making friends with people from different countries as English courses in English-speaking countries are usually quite multinational.



However, I do not fully agree with the above statement. For example, let's compare my two friends who have been English learners for two years. One of my friends started her course in Great Britain when her level of English was intermediate and, when she returned from studies which took her eight months, her level was upper-intermediate. The other friend was also at the same level as the first friend when she began her upper-intermediate course but in her home country, which is non -English- speaking country. In eight months since starting their upper-intermediate courses, they both took IELTS exams and passed them with the same scores.



In summary, I firmly believe that people who have the golden opportunity of having their English lessons in any English-speaking country are certainly lucky, but the result of learning first of all depends on the patience and diligence of English-language learners.

Answer 2

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Answer 3

Its really really good but you shouldn't contradict your thesis statement ( Learning english in an english envrnonment is not so good) keep up the good work!!